【任务呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
The Sea’s Surprise
Jim and Andy walked along the beach, looking for an adventure. They joked that some day they would find a talking fish or a mermaid or a bottle with a treasure map inside. So far they had only found shells and rocks and seaweed. Today though was different. The boys felt excited.
Sea crabs scampered on the rocks. Up one side and down the other. They were quick and lively. The tide didn’t seem to ever wash them away. Then Jim saw a fish. It was stranded on the beach, just flopping around.
“Can it talk?” Andy asked.
“It looks like any other fish,” Jim said. He picked it up gently and carried it to the water. “Do you think it will grant us any wishes?” Andy laughed.
The boys watched as the silver fish sped off through the water. “No. Maybe next time.” Jim grinned.
As the two friends walked farther down the beach they came upon a bottle. It was green with a cork in the mouth.
“Our luck will change. Does it have a map inside or a genie?” joked Andy.
Andy reached down and picked up the bottle. He rubbed it. Nothing happened. He pulled on the cork. Nothing happened. He shook it. Nothing happened.
“ Try the cork again. I bet the genie is waiting for us to release him. Or we’ll find a treasure map and have a real adventure,” Jim exclaimed.
Andy tugged again on the cork. He wiggled it back and forth. He twisted it around and around. Finally it popped out without breaking. Andy shook the bottle. Nothing came out. Looking inside he couldn’t see anything. Jim looked too and shook his head. Empty.
“It’s just an old wine bottle,” Jim complained. He grabbed the bottle and tossed it back onto the sand.
注意：
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1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1:
The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces. _______________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2:
Two boys ran after it.
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【写作思路与分析】
一、文本分析
1. 归纳基本信息
2. 理清故事情节
Jim和Andy想在海边寻宝 → 挽救了一条搁浅的鱼 → 碰到了一个瓶子 → ？？？ Beginning: Jim and Andy walked along the beach, looking for treasure. → Jim saw a stranded fish on the beach. → Jim picked the fish gently and carried it into the water. → They walked farther down the beach and came upon a bottle.→Andy reached down and picked up the bottle. → He rubbed the bottle, pulled on the cork and shook the bottle. Nothing happened.→Jim grabbed the
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bottle and tossed it back onto the sand. → The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces. → Climax:? → Two boys ran after it. → Ending:?
二、寻找情节线索
1. 梳理续写逻辑：细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落间的逻辑关系 Paragraph 1: The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces. What was in the broken bottle? What did Jim and Andy do? What happened to the broken bottle? Paragraph 2: Two boys ran after it. Why did the boys run after it? What did they find later?
Where was the stranded fish saved by Jim?
2. 归纳总结关键词：围绕划定的10个关键词，合理创新故事情节 felt excited, stranded—感受与状态 silver—颜色
treasure, bottle—重要事物
picked up, waiting for, shook the bottle, complained—动作 back and forth—方式
将关键词归类后，可以判断事物中的bottle在续写时必须使用，其他词可选择性使用。 三、预测情节发展
Paragraph 1：根据画线词picked up, silver, bottle可构思本段细节：瓶子碎了，Andy和Jim看见一把银(silver)钥匙掉在地上，Andy弯腰想拾起(pick up)钥匙。突然瓶子(bottle)又完好如初，钥匙又回到里面了。
Paragraph 2：根据画线词felt excited, treasure和stranded可构思本段细节：两个孩子跟着瓶子跑。他们进入海里时没有下沉而是漂浮在海上。他们感到很兴奋(felt excited)。瓶子把他们带到一个岛屿附近，那儿有很多财宝——是那条搁浅(stranded)的鱼来报恩的。
四、拟定提纲要点
Paragraph 1：
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hit a rock and shattered into many pieces, saw a long, silver key, bent over to pick up the key, came together to form a bottle, began rolling slowly toward the sea Paragraph 2：
ran after, entered the sea, floated on the surface, followed the bottle, took as much as possible
五、连接要点成篇
Paragraph 1：
The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces. Both Andy and Jim gasped as they saw a long, silver key on the ground in the glass pieces. Then they looked at each other. Why didn’t it make any noise when they shook the bottle? Why didn’t they see it? Andy bent over to pick up the key. Suddenly the glass pieces came together to form a bottle again. The key was mysteriously back inside! And the bottle began rolling slowly toward the sea. Paragraph 2：
Two boys ran after it. When they entered the sea, astonishingly they didn’t sink into the water but floated on the surface of it. They felt excited. They followed the bottle and then it stopped near an island where there was lots of treasure like diamonds and stones. “You can take as much as possible,” a voice came from the coast where a talking fish was swimming. It was the stranded fish that Jim saved and put back into the water.
【题型解题策略】 一、写作步骤
1．读文：精读文章，确定文章线索。
每篇文章都有各自独特的写作思路，通过精读文章，找到该篇文章的写作线索，如是以
时间为线索还是以空间为线索等，这样有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜(结尾)”。确定文章体裁和题材(话题)。注意文中的关键词，也就是故事中的时间、地点、人物和事件。
有效的阅读方法是：阅读原文的过程中确定文章的体裁→理清文章的结构及作者的写作意图→明白原文的情节→阅读过程中注意划线词语(因为这些词语是续写下文的暗示)→推敲已给出的续写段首，推理下文的发展方向→揣摩作者原文的语气，判断作者的情感态度。 2．审题：仔细审题，明确续写要求。
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一般短文后面的“注意”都有对此次短文续写的具体要求，如词数限制、使用几处下划线关键词语、续写段落的首句提示，这样考生才能做到“心中有数”。 3．谋段：研读首句，构思段落大意。
在读文、审题的基础上，先仔细阅读续写部分所给出的两段段首文字，再构思这两段要写的段落大意。根据原文情节和划线词汇确定好段落大意，选出每一段可能要用到的原文中带下划线的关键词。结合这些关键词，确定每一段的写作要点。增加次要情节，增加常识情节，这两段加起来要能写出10到15个句子，以满足续写词数要求。 4．初写：拟写草稿，修改错词病句。
在确定了思路和内容之后，最关键的就是结合提示语或者文中划线的关键词拟写草稿。拟写时，注意句子结构的多样性及语言的丰富性，并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯。写作时要注意所用的人称和时态要与原材料一致。标出续写部分中使用到的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语(5个以上)。 5．定稿：润色修改，使用高级表达。
写好初稿后，考生要结合原材料中故事线索读一读自己续写的内容。既要确保不出现与原材料相矛盾的地方，又要做到内容上前后连贯，语句通顺。润色续写部分，使之过渡与衔接自然，尽量使用高级词汇或短语，运用各种从句、介词短语结构、非谓语动词等高级表达。标出续写部分中使用到的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语。这一点可以帮助考生自己检查关键词的使用情况并根据情况做出修改。最后在誊写文字时，务必做到“字迹工整、清晰”。
二、写作策略
1. 如何写好开头 (1) 使用副词
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. （时间副词衔接+环境描写） (2) 使用形容词短语
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Desperate and hopeless, Jane knelt down, tears streaming down her face. （并列情绪形容词）
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. （状态形容词+as/though 引导的倒装句）
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Afraid that I might hurt the lovely small creature, I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse. (情绪形容词+从句)
We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we could
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find our way back. (3) 使用非谓语动词
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Feeling disappointed, Jane had to stay alone for another night. (-ing形式+情绪形容词）
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Feeling refreshed, she continued to walk along the stream to find the way out.(-ing形式+状态形容词） (4) 使用介词短语
At the end of the lane, he suddenly stopped.
At the sight of the snake, the little girl screamed at the top of her voice. (5) 使用从句
As he walked, he whistled
Although he was afraid, he jumped right in. (6) 使用对话或独白
“Let’s see who gets there first!” Rachel shouted, as she pedaled fast and zoomed past Jenny. The car abruptly stopped in front of him. \"Get into the car.\" Paul shouted at Mac. (7) 设定情景
We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. I looked out of the car window, winding rivers, lofty(高耸的) mountains, sunny beaches and deep valleys holding me entirely in their fascination. （视觉+环境描写+拟人） (8) 动作描写
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Dad exchanged a glance with me. Why not camp to satisfy Mom? （动作描写+问句衔接）
2. 如何营造故事的高潮 方法1 增加外部冲突
增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。冲突带来紧迫感, 将故事推
向必要的解决或崩溃。
(1) 角色之间的冲突 (人物观点差异, 竞争需要等)
例1 On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn't we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. 开车
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找旅馆——徒劳无功——母亲建议搭帐篷在他人后院——David和我倍感紧张，心有不悦（母子的观点不一） (2) 角色与环境之间的冲突
例2 Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. ……he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf: quickly catching up with him. Mac's heart jumped. ……, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, ……. Then it ……, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back ……
Mac骑车独自行，路遇饿狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。（人——角色与狼——环境大战） (3) 时间依赖的发展 ：决策变得紧急
例3 The car abruptly stopped in front of him. “Get into the car.” Paul shouted at Mac. Mac jumped off the bike and slid into the car without delay as the wolf was just two steps away and was about to tear Mac into pieces. What a narrow escape! 骑车突停面前——急喊上车——Max上车避险——饿狼近在咫尺（此情此景，刻不容缓） (4) 增加障碍：人物角色必须克服 挑战, 以达到他们的目标
例4 But before we jumped off the horses, we found that we had been off the beaten track and got lost. We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we could find our way back. 小兔突现——马儿受惊---草原迷路(障碍1)---天色渐黑(障碍2）——又累又饿（障碍3）——心理恐慌（障碍4）
方法2 放大内心冲突
放大内心冲突（你的角色的内心斗争）也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。现在我们在来看高考读后续写中的内心冲突是如何体现的。
例5 Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn’t help crying, “Hadn’t I quarrelled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldn't be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying.” She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
夫妇争吵——独自行走——荒野走散——夜色渐黑——独处森林——阴森恐怖——后悔莫及（内心冲突的刻画）内心独白（往昔对比+虚拟语气使用+旁边描写是常见技巧之一）
方法3 使用环境描写增加不确定性
充分利用环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用。当故事角色在碰到困难时候，我们往
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往要加大笔墨来描写故事环境的黑暗、恐怖和不祥。强化环境描写增强了高潮元素，我们感受到了紧张的倍增。
例6 Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest (黑暗). Even worse, the temperature suddenly dropped dramatically. (寒冷)
例7 It didn’t take long for the forest to be enveloped in darkness (黑暗). Her rasping (急促的) breath steamed (寒冷) in the moonlight and her throat was parched (干渴的) from thirst.
三、注意点
1．后续情节一般为故事的高潮或结局，要尽量符合原文思路，设计并发展情节，想象要合理，情节要连贯，并求得与读者的心理共鸣，让读者回味无穷。
2．续写时心态要端正，所续写内容要积极、健康向上，把事物美好的一面展示出来。 3．利用自己已有的知识和经验，在继承原作者风格和语言基础之上，准确、地道地表达，充分展示语言的表现力。提高关联词与过渡语的使用率，增强整句表现力。
4．如果所给短文为议论文，那么议论文中的段落首句多为主题句，观点鲜明。续写时，要围绕段落分论点确定论证方法，如正反对比、例证等。
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